Topic for the Final Presentation

My final Presentation will be discussing the changes in architecture and urban planning in Beijing,China. Since China is developing its capital to a modern metropolis to meet the need of economic growth, there are many people questioning about the fact that is Beijing walking forward to the right way. As a result, in these presentation I will bring up information to my audience in a Middle style and let them think about the fact and my opinions.

Topic : Changes of life and architecture in Beijing

Speech Goal: My goal is to inform my audience the background and changes between the old and new Beijing.

Introduction: From the time China reopened its door to the West, all of the things in China has been changing. Recently, the big event, Olympic 2008 in Beijing brings attention how far Beijing is changing in urban planning and architectural design from the world. Besides the big event, the deconstruction of the city and the new and fancy buildings has been a big question in the world of architecture and habitation in China.

Statement of the topic: The fact of the changing of Beijing is an unstoppable movement in Beijing.

Preview: Discussing the background and reason of architectural changes in Beijing.

Transition: The Style of building in Beijing goes extreme.

Point one: Including those Olympic stadiums and public facilities, the designs of them are totally opposite the “Old Beijing”. While some of the people claims that those building destroying the historical Beijing, others support the movement because that will bring the revolution not only to China but to the whole architecture world.
Transition: Changes are not only happen in architectural design but also the urban planning.

Point two: Because of the big projects which is to accomplish the goal of making a new Beijing, the resident of the whole city have to move from the hutong to new apartment complex. Urban planning takes time to get its result so we can only wait for it. However, as an example from the U.S., separate the residential area from the city might face transportation problems.
Transition: Beside the worries, one thing we can sure about on the bright side is that big changes in residential area will helps the improvement of public health issue.

Point three: Beijing is, without doubt, an historical city not only to the Chinese but to the humanity. We want to have a piece of history while keep the development of economic going. Apparently, the old building structure will not be suitable for nowadays uses in commercial and residential. There we meet the conflict of modern and history. What we can do to success in keeping both of them? or there is no chance for the greed purpose?

Transition: We do not know what the right answer is but we can work on it.

Conclusion: The changes happen in Beijing are something we can not stop but we can deal with it in a logical way. Besides, we should remember something in human history, taking risk in our development is part of the journey

Real World Example : Movie Critic

The original
from Burr,Ty. A darker 'Knight' July 2008

These are good and necessary things to ponder, yet they're nearly lost in the cross-cutting clutter. You come away impressed, oppressed, provoked, and beaten down, holding on to Ledger's squirrelly incandescence as a beacon in the darkness.

Parallelism appears in critics a lot, especially in Movie critics. Their purpose is to give the readers a brief but attractive information to the movie.
In this sentence,"You come away impressed, oppressed, provoked, and beaten down, holding on to Ledger's squirrelly incandescence as a beacon in the darkness.", The first three adjective is talking about the experience of the viewer of the movie. The later phrases are trying to even stronger the idea of how impress the view will be.

In stead of the original witting, this is a alternative:
These are good and necessary things to ponder, yet they're nearly lost in the cross-cutting clutter. You come away impressed, oppressed, provoked and even more, beaten down, holding on, to Ledger's squirrelly incandescence as a beacon in the darkness.

The commas will helps to strength the words"down" and "on" in order to describ the exciting experience in the film.

"Real World" grammar example

Crocker Science House
In this advertisement, the feature of the building ,"Beautiful architecture , classic interior, and fully furnished, quiet,comfortable living space."
The first three words are the characters of the building appearance while the rest of the sentences is providing information to the readers what living conditions they can get in the building. So, in this sentence, parallelism is use in a way to separate information rather than giving readers a strong and attractive sentences.
The other parallel sentence is "Crocker Science House traditions include activities that are intellectually enhancing, service oriented, and of course , fun."
This time, the words are not parallel in order to emphasize the last word- fun while the first two descriptions are solid in formation.

Peers Educating to and Rape
This notice is written in a list of parallelism form.
Each of the point started with a verb. This emphazize what you, the readers, will do in the meeting. The readers can easily get the information and get the strong idea of what to do in the meeting. Overall, using a list can make the notice sharp and clean.

Improvement

In The Craft of Research, the authors suggested to set up a relationship between you and the readers. I always consider there is only a role in a essay - the promoter and the receiver. When I am the writer, everything I do is to attract and persuade my readers. however, in the book, the authors told us that the role of the writer can be separate into half. Half of the role is to stand to the side of the readers and get their attention. The other half is to while persuading the audience, you can still develop your own ideas and express it within the discussion to the audience.
There is another thing I found out that I can improve. When giving out evidences, I usually use one evidence or one reasons to one problem. According to the book, reasons and evidences can be linked in a way that they related to each other. In other words, the one reason can lead to the others and on and on. This make the essay more coherence and can help developing the ideas of ours.

P.S. On pages 161-164, I found these transition words is very useful in a research paper.

Summary of the Craft of Research

This book is a illustration of the strategy of writing a research paper. Here is some of the part which I think is most important to writers:

The first important thing we should do is to write down every idea pop up in your mind and every detail from the sources which you think it is worth to mention in your paper.This would help you to remember the ideas, understand the idea and finally the most important part : to develop the idea in your own perspective. However, we should be careful of the way you write. Because you are writing a research paper, you should not just using "you" or "what you think" when you are discussing or developing the ideas.

The second thing is to narrow your topic. A topic which is too wide can lead to a failure of ideas development. We can start a topic by questioning about it. Besides, it is easy for us to think critically.When we are questioning, we are expected to solve the problem too. Also, we shoild keep in mind that some of the readers are just reading you essay for fun, they are not really seeking for a answer to a problem. As a result, we should get their interest to the problem and led them to the answer.

The last one is the spirit of your essay- the arrguement. Only when we do a good arrgument can gain our audiences's attention and strenght our point of view. The begining is to make a claim. Obviously, the claim is the idea of your essay and you would like to discuss it. So, after we give out a claim. we need to have reason and evidences. In order to have a good arrgument, we should not only give out only one or couple reasons. The reasons and the evidences should be link together or in otherwords, they are collbrate with each other. For example, because there is reason A, we can bring up reaon a, b, c..... in a logicla way.